Apparently, my thesis statement is perfect, but my essy is not organized properly to follow the thesis. The problem is...I don't wanna reorganize my paper to follow my thesis. I like the way I have it organized. I am reviewing a restaurant, and my paper is written to follow you through the dining experience, frm walking in, to dessert, to sitting by the fireplace enjoying after dinner cocktails. But this doesn't follow my thesis. If I reorganize to follow my thesis, the whole essy is gonna be choppy and hard to follow.
I don't know what to do to make this right.
So...anyone wanna read my paper and offer up suggestions?
I will be forever grateful
It's 1,000 words.


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I'll pm you my email address... I can take a look at it tomorrow

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