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    Quote Originally Posted by WiseGuy_TX View Post
    ...SG, Cyril has a fetish for "trained strippers". We see this theme here and we saw it in the Dream Girls thread. I thought Cyril would have fallen in love with mediocrity with all her math training. Maybe it's just "Stepford Wife" training he craves. ..oh well.
    You are getting better at your jokes. That was the first funny post I have seen from you. Good job.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Dirty Ernie View Post
    WTF is this? "Closer" meets the "300"? I've just returned from the desert (viva LV) and I'm having a hard time reading this while keeping my oil lamp lit in my Bedouin tent cuz I'm loling so hard.

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    Hard to fault Cyril here cuz, like the DreamGirls thread, he posts strictly for the mob living in his brain. I'm afraid the rest of us must stew in our envy.
    First thing you need to do is relax. I am having fun writing this novel and I will continue to write it for so called "mob in my head". No body is putting gun to your head to read it. Have you not heard of a thing called logic?

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    Quote Originally Posted by Cyril View Post
    ... But keep in mind when you are attempting to write a novel, grammar is the last thing your mind is thinking about; you have to think about geography, history, customs, etc. It is an interesting experience though. I am loving it.
    Grammer is the last thing on your mind? Okay.

    Apparantly you may have to "think" about the history, but you've allowed youself to use plenty of artistic license.
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    Quote Originally Posted by verfolgung View Post
    Grammer is the last thing on your mind? Okay.

    Apparantly you may have to "think" about the history, but you've allowed youself to use plenty of artistic license.
    It is not as easy it looks. You have to do research into history, geography, cluture, etc but it is fun. I am enjoying it.

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    ^^^ You may have researched some things, but not everything in your novel lines up correctly. Like I said, you've used plenty of artistic license to put different periods of time together.
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    Quote Originally Posted by verfolgung View Post
    ^^^ You may have researched some things, but not everything in your novel lines up correctly. Like I said, you've used plenty of artistic license to put different periods of time together.
    Go ahead and mention it. If you are correct, I will modify the script.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Cyril View Post
    You are getting better at your jokes. That was the first funny post I have seen from you. Good job.
    ...thanks. Maybe there is hope for you after all.
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    Quote Originally Posted by WiseGuy_TX View Post
    ...thanks. Maybe there is hope for you after all.
    Of course. There is a hope for all of us including you and I.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Cyril View Post
    Of course. There is a hope for all of us including you and I.
    Ugh, really dude? You're trying to write a novel and you can't even speak properly?

    You do not say there is hope for "I". You say there is hope for "me".

    The proper sentence would read:
    There is hope for us all including you and me.

    Although frankly, this is redundant. When you say there is hope for us all that includes "you and me".

    Stop wasting words to make yourself sound important. You're not Dickens, so you're not being paid by the word.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Cyril View Post
    Dude,

    Relax! We do acknowledge your status as an exemplary PL. You are in no danger of loosing it. No one can challenge you for that status.

    Ok, this is not directed solely at Cyril, but how come people do not know that indicating the loss of something is spelled losing, not loosing? Loosing is to make something loose, not the act of loss. At least 50% of the posts using that word have it spelled incorrectly. If it was a once in a while thing, I would say "typo", but too many people do it repetitively.

    Ok, end of pet-peeve rant.

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    Quote Originally Posted by vmurphy252 View Post
    Ok, this is not directed solely at Cyril, but how come people do not know that indicating the loss of something is spelled losing, not loosing? Loosing is to make something loose, not the act of loss. At least 50% of the posts using that word have it spelled incorrectly. If it was a once in a while thing, I would say "typo", but too many people do it repetitively.

    Ok, end of pet-peeve rant.
    For some twist of fate, I got lucky in this case. I think both "loose" and "lose" make sense in this context.

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    Quote Originally Posted by JayATee View Post
    Ugh, really dude? You're trying to write a novel and you can't even speak properly?

    You do not say there is hope for "I". You say there is hope for "me".

    The proper sentence would read:
    There is hope for us all including you and me.

    Although frankly, this is redundant. When you say there is hope for us all that includes "you and me".

    Stop wasting words to make yourself sound important. You're not Dickens, so you're not being paid by the word.
    It is I who decides whether there is hope for I or me.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Cyril View Post
    It is I who decides whether there is hope for I or me.
    Umm... no. Learn to speak or stop posting this ridiculous drivel while expecting us all to take you seriously. This is beyond pathetic.
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    Quote Originally Posted by JayATee View Post
    Umm... no. Learn to speak or stop posting this ridiculous drivel while expecting us all to take you seriously. This is beyond pathetic.
    Show me where I asked you to take me seriously. I think you are volunteering your seriousness.

    You will force your point more impressively if you do not make any grammatical mistakes yourself. It will be more credible if you make your point through your actions instead of your words. This is exactly what I told your friend Mediocrity.

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    It is perfectly all right to criticize but you have to earn the credibility before your criticism will be considered. Few suggestions for folks who wish to write polemics:

    - If you want to criticize someone's grammar, at least make sure that your grammar itself is sound

    - If you say there are some inconsistencies then point out those inconsistencies

    - If you say Cyril's writing style is cold then define what you consider cold and then pick some excerpts to illustrate your point

    - Once again make your point through your action not through your tall claims like your triple degrees in molecular biology, which I have no use for

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    - If you want to criticize someone's grammar, at least make sure that your grammar itself is sound: Not speaking for those who comment on general posts, but the grammar in your novel is fair game since it is supposed to be a piece of legitimate writing, not a form of informal banter. One need not have proper grammer in a general post to critique your formal writing.

    - If you say there are some inconsistencies then point out those inconsistencies Why? Once you've been informed that they exist, then you should try to find them yourself. It is not up to us to correct all of your mistakes; it is up to you.

    - If you say Cyril's writing style is cold then define what you consider cold and then pick some excerpts to illustrate your point Already been done. If you want more examples simply look at Chapters 1 through 6.

    - Once again make your point through your action not through your tall claims like your triple degrees in molecular biology, which I have no use for. You can't criticise someone for providing their credentials when it's in response to an off-handed comment made by you questioning their level of inteligence.
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    I'm going to ignore everything else here for a minute, and limit my questions. I'm a writer, and I probably wouldn't post anything I don't want stolen on the internet. I mean, okay, probably no one is going to steal Immaculate Love, but still - it's bad form.

    Finish your first chapter, send it off to a publisher and see if they want it. Don't waste time on a product no one is going to buy. Try one of those penny romance publishers that have Fabio on the cover of their books or something. Don't try to use SW for free editing. Editors are professionals, they get paid for what they do, and you need one.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Cyril View Post
    Show me where I asked you to take me seriously. I think you are volunteering your seriousness.
    So basically what you're saying is that you're not here to post anything of value. Which means that you just admitted to being a troll. Good job!
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    Quote Originally Posted by verfolgung View Post
    - If you want to criticize someone's grammar, at least make sure that your grammar itself is sound: Not speaking for those who comment on general posts, but the grammar in your novel is fair game since it is supposed to be a piece of legitimate writing, not a form of informal banter. One need not have proper grammer in a general post to critique your formal writing.

    - If you say there are some inconsistencies then point out those inconsistencies Why? Once you've been informed that they exist, then you should try to find them yourself. It is not up to us to correct all of your mistakes; it is up to you.

    - If you say Cyril's writing style is cold then define what you consider cold and then pick some excerpts to illustrate your point Already been done. If you want more examples simply look at Chapters 1 through 6.

    - Once again make your point through your action not through your tall claims like your triple degrees in molecular biology, which I have no use for. You can't criticise someone for providing their credentials when it's in response to an off-handed comment made by you questioning their level of inteligence.
    Anyone can say baseless things like these. This entire post had no merit whatsoever.

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    Quote Originally Posted by JayATee View Post
    So basically what you're saying is that you're not here to post anything of value. Which means that you just admitted to being a troll. Good job!
    What I am saying is that your opinion means very little to me unless you earn the credibility. This is a poor quality argument coming from someone who wants to be a lawyer.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Cyril View Post
    Anyone can say baseless things like these. This entire post had no merit whatsoever.
    Baseless? Huh. I'm one of the few posters who even bothered to proof read any part of your crappy novel. The post is not baseless, because I have already posted several examples of your poor grammar and poor writing.

    You want one tip? Ask yourself why Greek sailors are referring to places by their Latin names. Names that in some cases were not translated from Greek to Latin for several hundred years after the time of your story. Trust me, there are plenty more inconsistencies and errors in your narrative.
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    Quote Originally Posted by verfolgung View Post
    Baseless? Huh. I'm one of the few posters who even bothered to proof read any part of your crappy novel. The post is not baseless, because I have already posted several examples of your poor grammar and poor writing.

    Heck you can't even get through Chapter 1 without making a mistake. Just read your first and last paragraphs of the chapter.
    You are beginning to sound like a broken record on the grammar. I thanked you for proof reading Chapter – One. You did an excellent job.

    My ingenuity does not lie in grammar or proof reading but in my creativity. There are tons of people like you who can do this kind of clerical thing. But there are not many who have imagination and vision that can produce a plot like Immaculate Love.

    This work is pro bono publico. I am not making any money from this love story. Heck, I do not even go to the strip clubs.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Cyril View Post
    Anyone can say baseless things like these. This entire thread had no merit whatsoever.
    ...FYI, another joke Cyril.

    I now order you to work harder and end the novel without delay!
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    Quote Originally Posted by WiseGuy_TX View Post
    ...FYI, another joke Cyril.

    I now order you to work harder and end the novel without delay!
    I noticed, I make less grammatical mistakes when I write a chapter on the weekend. So, to avoid heartache and pain on grammar loving peanut gallery, I will abstain from writing the seventh chapter till the weekend arrives. However, there will be no guarantee that the chapter will be devoid of grammatical mistakes. I will certainly try though.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Perry View Post
    I'm going to ignore everything else here for a minute, and limit my questions. I'm a writer, and I probably wouldn't post anything I don't want stolen on the internet. I mean, okay, probably no one is going to steal Immaculate Love, but still - it's bad form.

    Finish your first chapter, send it off to a publisher and see if they want it. Don't waste time on a product no one is going to buy. Try one of those penny romance publishers that have Fabio on the cover of their books or something. Don't try to use SW for free editing. Editors are professionals, they get paid for what they do, and you need one.
    I am writing this novel for the benefit of people. I do not wish to gain anything of monetary value from Immaculate Love.

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