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    I've been working on this one for a few days now. It's a poem in my personal favorite style, the villanelle. Please feel free to comment/critique. I call it, "My Funeral Pyre."


    Seeking to lie within her fire,
    Intoxicated dreams do flow.
    I gladly build my funeral pyre.

    Deep and dark is my desire.
    I cannot simply let it go,
    Seeking to lie within her fire.

    Her flick'ring flames, she does conspire
    To leave me burning bright, and so
    I gladly build my funeral pyre.

    More sustenance I do require
    Before I see myself below,
    Seeking to lie within her fire.

    From this life I must retire,
    But not so soon my dear, although
    I gladly build my funeral pyre.

    T'escape these thoughts, I must go higher.
    And yet, despite all that I know,
    Seeking to lie within her fire,
    I gladly build my funeral pyre.

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    Rhyming is back? I like it but I feel like you're constrained by the rhyming - is it more of a song?
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    So, a villanelle has a very specific structure, to include the rhyming scheme, the repeated verses, and the rhythm.

    I'm generally a fan of free flowing verse as well, but something about the villanelle speaks to me. I think it's the challenge of fitting your thoughts into the rigidity if the structure.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Titus23 View Post
    So, a villanelle has a very specific structure, to include the rhyming scheme, the repeated verses, and the rhythm.

    I'm generally a fan of free flowing verse as well, but something about the villanelle speaks to me. I think it's the challenge of fitting your thoughts into the rigidity if the structure.
    Ah, I see. Still, you have to admit, it would make a good song.
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    It's definitely a form of poetry that would blend well with music

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    A villanelle (also known as villanesque)[1] is a nineteen-line poetic form consisting of five tercets followed by a quatrain. There are two refrains and two repeating rhymes, with the first and third line of the first tercet repeated alternately until the last stanza, which includes both repeated lines. The villanelle is an example of a fixed verse form. The word derives from Latin, then Italian, and is related to the initial subject of the form being the pastoral.

    The form started as a simple ballad-like song with no fixed form; this fixed quality would only come much later, from the poem "Villanelle (J'ay perdu ma Tourterelle)" (1606) by Jean Passerat. From this point, its evolution into the "fixed form" used in the present day is debated. Despite its French origins, the majority of villanelles have been written in English, a trend which began in the late nineteenth century. The villanelle has been noted as a form that frequently treats the subject of obsessions, and one which appeals to outsiders; its defining feature of repetition prevents it from having a conventional tone.

    https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Villanelle

    Seems I learn something here every day.

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    Doesn't it sound like a blast to write? Talk about a poetic challenge! I occasionally get lines stuck in my head, lie within her fire in this case, and it's fun to try and create something out of it.

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    Quote Originally Posted by slowpoke View Post
    A villanelle (also known as villanesque)[1] is a nineteen-line poetic form consisting of five tercets followed by a quatrain. There are two refrains and two repeating rhymes, with the first and third line of the first tercet repeated alternately until the last stanza, which includes both repeated lines. The villanelle is an example of a fixed verse form. The word derives from Latin, then Italian, and is related to the initial subject of the form being the pastoral.

    The form started as a simple ballad-like song with no fixed form; this fixed quality would only come much later, from the poem "Villanelle (J'ay perdu ma Tourterelle)" (1606) by Jean Passerat. From this point, its evolution into the "fixed form" used in the present day is debated. Despite its French origins, the majority of villanelles have been written in English, a trend which began in the late nineteenth century. The villanelle has been noted as a form that frequently treats the subject of obsessions, and one which appeals to outsiders; its defining feature of repetition prevents it from having a conventional tone.

    https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Villanelle

    Seems I learn something here every day.


    I knew it. Also, I knew what a quatrain was but not a tercet. We have our own Paul-M Verlaine here now with poesy coming straight from your coeur qui pleure sans raison
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