i recently had a bunch of poems published on literotica.com and after i got home tonight i found out they did a review from some of my selections. so, i am sharing the review with all of you. what they have done is used excerpts from the poems.
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Friday, June 25, 2004
Wel it’s deja vu all over again--I did new poem reviews here on Fridays for over a year. So as Liar heads off into the delights of midsummer here I go again--
dcpoet44 offers up an overflowing fistful of poems today--six of them. I suggest you read them all because taken together they form a heartfelt treatise on love lost and survived. I did though have a few favorites:
Let the Critics Follow is a roadmap to reading dc’s poetry. It’s clear and well-stated, and toward the end becomes almost prayerlike, reminding me here of the 23rd Psalm.
My pen is my bodyguard.
It always protects me
Even though
My shield is down,
It makes me tough as hell
When the line is set on fire
As a fiery lead on
For the critics to follow
When reaching the end
As I explode off the page.
When You Need Someone takes the reader through a maelstrom of emotions, from pain to the flowering of trust reborn.
But the love
You leave behind
Shatters into pieces
As if a window blown
In by a storm
Leaving you empty and cold.
You pound your fists
Upon the pillow
Saying never again.
Then a knock comes upon your door-
You want to say go away
But the pain lifts you up
Until you fall into the arms of a friend
Your Eyes is a lovely appeal from poet to readers, asking us to feel with him and, in doing so, help him escape the pain. I think this one was my favorite of his submissions today.
i open myself
to you in ways
that will give the best effect
when your thumbs rest
on the beats of my heart.
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if any of you would like to see the full poems.....please let me know and i'd be glad to post them here.
here is the new poem that i wrote in regards to a dancer.....
index : Non-Erotic Poetry :
A Poem For A Dancer
by dcpoet44 ©
I cannot forget the first time
We hung out together
Outside of the club
When we had lunch at Ponderosa
In the early evening.
The outside cover of you ever so appealing
Left me feeling I could conquer the world
Just be being around you.
During conversation I wanted to know if
There were any coffee shops
That might have poetry readings.
You told me about two,
And I liked the one
Called the Coffee Bean.
After we finished eating,
I followed you and your boyfriend
To where the café was located.
We went inside, the room shaped
Like a rectangle,
And on the outside
Of the building was a banner
That said, open mic Friday nights 8-10 PM.
I ordered a café latte
And asked about the open mic
And if that was for poetry readings.
And was told as to when they were held.
I was excited about the prospect
Of reading my poetry
In front of my friends and others.
After sitting down we talked
About when all of us would meet here
To hear me read.
We left that night,
And the following week
I read in front of a small crowd.
It all comes down to this:
A mutual appreciation for the arts
This piece is all about respect
For a dancer in Fredonia NY
That is intellectually beautiful.
Look deep inside the cover
The next time you go to a strip club,
Because if you don’t,
You’ll lose out on what used to be before your eyes.
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hope the piece is appreciated by the ladies......feedback is welcome on the piece.......don


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